Dark web copywriting tips

Castration for $30,000 too expensive? How about a beating for just $2,000? These sites on the dark web belie the surprisingly beige truth about hiring a hitman from the dark web…

Dark web screenshot for a hitman website
Turns out dark-web copywriters can be as bland as their clean-web counterparts.

The New York Times recently featured two images from hitman-for-hire websites on the dark net…

Naturally, I reviewed the copywriting from the point of view of a website copywriter and I was amazed.

These purported hitmen have dipped their pen in the same beige ink as most legit businesses.

Another dark web screenshot for a hitman website
This one is better — a little colour at least.

Their “assassination and life-ruining services” are made less persuasive by —

☠️ Feeble adjectives — “professional”, “experienced”, “convenient”

☠️ Assumption of knowledge — why is a blinding 10% pricier than a crippling?

☠️ All telling, no showing — “We try our best to keep to contractual terms”

I give both sites a C, but there are some glimmers of hope for their dark web copywriters —

💀 Attaching benefits to features — “We assign a strong man in the country of the mark. [Feature] No expensive flights… keep the price to the lowest possible. [Benefit]”

💀 Use of specificity as proof — “We have 48 hitmen on call” [Not “nearly 50”]

Overall, however, a surprisingly corporate experience. In fact, since this blog post was published, I know that dark web entrepreneurs hire web copywriters. Because I’ve been approached.

But here’s the million-dollar question… Would you pay the extra $2,000 to upgrade your mortal enemy to a “painless” poisoning?

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